2014-09-06 Jay writes a song for the CWCki Forums
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Idling
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- 11 Sie 2014
Man I don't have any singing voice whatsoever.
It's not quite a 'Booming Voice' yet, but it's no singing voice.
Nuclear Launch Detected
It's not quite a 'Booming Voice' yet, but it's no singing voice.
Nuclear Launch Detected
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- 8 Maj 2013
Well, he compared it to Sabaton, which is Swedish band who play power metal songs about war so maybe look them to get an idea of what he was thinking. I'm still pissed off that he listen to Sabaton though. God, damn it all...
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- 11 Lip 2014
Two things:
1) You're a pretty talented musician and that tune is wicked catchy. Just slow the tempo down and add some steel drums, and I wanna take you down to Kokomo.
2) I approve of your choice of instrumentation. Ukelele, y/n? That's probably the most "epic" instrument Jay can hope for.
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- 20 Maj 2014
This is catchy as hell. Really like it. I couldn't see how Jay's lyrics could be made to scan, but you did it.
*applauds*
And personally, your voice is ideal for this kind of song - expressive and pleasant.
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- 15 Cze 2014
We're allowed moving off metals and can just call him the soil lord now? Awesome!
That is amazing. I also concur with the steel drums being added idea.
Total Dingus
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- 25 Maj 2014
Is this technically a song if there's no melody or instrumentation involved?
Isn't this just, like, a love poem for us?
Unless he sings it on a livestream, right?
Isn't this just, like, a love poem for us?
Unless he sings it on a livestream, right?
DrChristianTroy
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- 3 Lut 2013
With Chris and GK from what we've seen they had very few friends (real or not in Chris' case). Instead they played vidya and watched TV. This replaced social interaction for them.
In the case of Iconoclast, he's just a whiny bitch.
Idling
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- 11 Sie 2014
Two things:
1) You're a pretty talented musician and that tune is wicked catchy. Just slow the tempo down and add some steel drums, and I wanna take you down to Kokomo.
2) I approve of your choice of instrumentation. Ukelele, y/n? That's probably the most "epic" instrument Jay can hope for.
Yes that's the ukulele. The only way I could see those lyrics set to more metal instruments would be in some kind of ultra cheezy hair metal song.
Also thanks for your nice words, but I'm actually no musician at all. Those are just the four pop song chords in basic variations (and those chords are nearly all I know how to play, so I'd have no idea how to add steel drums).
Actually Jay's lyrics can't be made to scan - I had to make a slight modification, because the line "Burning them alive, even after throwing the towel!" doesn't fit any meter:
X x x X X x x X
Five year old boy, snarling at fire
x x X x x X x X
With clenched fists and sadistic scowl
X x x X x x X
He lives to punish crooks dire
x x X x x X x X x X x X x x (?)
Burning them alive, even after throwing the towel!
The Golden Knight powiedział(a):
He wrote that at the end of his last stream.
It's not astonishing that he considers writing a song to be super easy. Getting all the sentences to be around the same length and making them rhyme is all that is needed for him.
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- Dołączono
- 6 Lis 2013
Hey guys I wrote a song. I have a mental melody going for it which I'll try to transcribe and harmonize later. But here's the lyrics.
A traveling minstrel, this my song
A song of love’s labours, but lost, not won
About a man called The Golden Knight
Though really his name is Jay Geis
Now this Golden Knight, the story goes
Is presently troubled with endless woes
But past the delusion, he caused his own pain
By word of the soul he did stain
A knight is meant to be chivalrous,
Loyal, above all, brave
But there once was a time when he could care less
For the girl he loved – the knave!
When the opportunity showed its face
For the ideal girl
Forgetting his duties, a horrid disgrace,
An act which would make one’s toes curl
A knight is supposed to face his fears
To succeed at his duties despite all leers
And yet this man Jay, he did pitifully faint
When with a needle was acquaint
To say naught of the time he went with his lover
To ride the coasters; his head he did cover
A knight should do anything for his lady,
But selfish, he stayed with safety
A knight should be fit and very well-fed,
Such he did claim was true
But besides lacking weight, though he otherwise said
Good vegetables he did refuse
The Golden Knight is, too, arrogant
Prideful, he cannot see
The flaws he possesses, unmakes him a gent
Jay Geis is quite perfect, says he
But finally, the most damning word
That will ever his horrid soul preserve
Is the story of the time he proved
That in presence of children is moved
So should you once meet him, be very aware
Of the problems you'll see in this man of despair
The Copper Serf, or the Silver Squire
Whose song has seen light by this lyre.
A traveling minstrel, this my song
A song of love’s labours, but lost, not won
About a man called The Golden Knight
Though really his name is Jay Geis
Now this Golden Knight, the story goes
Is presently troubled with endless woes
But past the delusion, he caused his own pain
By word of the soul he did stain
A knight is meant to be chivalrous,
Loyal, above all, brave
But there once was a time when he could care less
For the girl he loved – the knave!
When the opportunity showed its face
For the ideal girl
Forgetting his duties, a horrid disgrace,
An act which would make one’s toes curl
A knight is supposed to face his fears
To succeed at his duties despite all leers
And yet this man Jay, he did pitifully faint
When with a needle was acquaint
To say naught of the time he went with his lover
To ride the coasters; his head he did cover
A knight should do anything for his lady,
But selfish, he stayed with safety
A knight should be fit and very well-fed,
Such he did claim was true
But besides lacking weight, though he otherwise said
Good vegetables he did refuse
The Golden Knight is, too, arrogant
Prideful, he cannot see
The flaws he possesses, unmakes him a gent
Jay Geis is quite perfect, says he
But finally, the most damning word
That will ever his horrid soul preserve
Is the story of the time he proved
That in presence of children is moved
So should you once meet him, be very aware
Of the problems you'll see in this man of despair
The Copper Serf, or the Silver Squire
Whose song has seen light by this lyre.
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- Dołączono
- 10 Sty 2014
Nuclear Launch
- by The-Golden-Knight, 15 minutes, 32s ago
- Literature / Poetry / Children's / Songs & Lyrics
Nuclear launch detected!
(Instrumental)
'97 in blazes, planets at war
Super-weapons sent to purge the trolls
Death lasers and rockets couldn't smash the door
One final trick, catastrophic tolls
Five year old boy, snarling at fire
With clenched fists and sadistic scowl
He lives to punish crooks dire
Burning them alive, even after throwing the towel!
Get ready for 20 kilotons of doom and awe!
Detected a nuclear launch!
Annihilation!
Strike fast!
Show me that you concede
To my nuclear launch!
Consequences to your actions, have you not seen?
The valley of the banned for aeons to come
"There's something wrong, I'm supposed to be clean!"
"Is there something about nuking the scum?"
Doom and gloom follow in your wake,
All you love gone in mushroom flame,
You sacrifice civility for fun's sake
And plunge your home into shame.
Get ready for 20 kilotons of doom and awe!
Detected a nuclear launch!
Annihilation!
Strike fast!
Show me that you concede
To my nuclear launch!
(Guitar solos!)
"Waa, what ever can I do?"
Detect a nuclear launch!
Show me that you concede
To the nuclear launch!
Annihilation!
Strike fast!
The nuclear launch!
Nuclear Launchby The-Golden-Knight
Literature / Poetry / Children's / Songs & Lyrics©2014 The-Golden-Knight
Another set of first-draft song lyrics that got spurred by Sabaton, this time it is mostly as a way for me to divert my anger due to a "grotesque misunderstanding" about my comic book and an unauthorized wiki. This heavy \M/ETAL song actually gives the essence of Myth of the Legendary Warrior, believe it or not: lots of explosions, bad guys dying, and the good guys learning that blowing stuff up is *not* always the right answer. So, no mature filter because like myself, I expect my viewers - young and mature alike - to have the guts to deal with such ionizing subject matter.
So what the heck is this doing categorized as "Children's?" Well, Myth of the Legendary Warrior IS supposed to be rated TV-Y7 (even despite its violence), and there isn't any better way to prove it. Intentionally, if you kids can handle the Powerpuff Girls and the Original Star Wars trilogy, you should be fine with Young Guardian facing his greatest dilemma: to nuke or not to nuke.
I will say, based on said misunderstanding, that I have sworn on my soul there is no sexual content in my comic book series! In fact, I have been more afraid that people would react negatively to the violence levels. I mean, it's a series where human bad guys are shot in the face! With *bullets!* Based on my research, this seems to break some kind of cartoon bylaw, to which I say: youtu.be/Hh_gIxTitMM?t=36s Or if you prefer, I think this one is a pinch punnier: youtu.be/73OiRZf7DsM?t=2m19s
So if my writing is all garbage, fine. It was mostly meant for art therapy anyway, to help get the anger out of my system.
Step back, Macklemore! This niggas got talent.
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- 3 Lut 2013
I'd donate to a kickstarter for this.
Idling
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- 11 Sie 2014
Can anybody tell me what the line "97' in blazes" is referencing? That line seems kinda random. When I google it, all I find is a bible passage, and I don't think Jay is actually capable enough to make such a reference.
Although the passage seems to thematically fit the song pretty well:
God Jay rules: there’s something to shout over!
On the double, mainlands and islands—celebrate!
Bright clouds and storm clouds circle ’round him;
Right and justice anchor his rule.
Fire blazes out before him,
Flaming high up the craggy mountains.
His lightnings light up the world;
Earth, wide-eyed, trembles in fear.
The mountains take one look atGod Jay
And melt, melt like wax before earth’sLord Golden Knight.
The heavens announce that he’ll set everything right,
And everyone will see it happen—glorious!
All who serve handcraftedgods trolls will be sorry—
And they were so proud of their ragamuffingods trolls!
On your knees, all yougods trolls—worship him!
AndZion Deviant Art, you listen and take heart!
Daughters ofZion Deviant Art, sing your hearts out:
God Jay has done it all, has set everything right.
You,God Jay, are High God the Golden Knight of the cosmos,
Far, far higher than any of thegods trolls.
God Jay loves all who hate evil,
And those who love him he keeps safe,
Snatches them from the grip of the wicked.
Light-seeds are planted in the souls ofGod’s Jay's people,
Joy-seeds are planted in good heart-soil.
So,God’s Jay's people, shout praise to God Jay,
Give thanks to ourHoly God Golden Knight!
Although the passage seems to thematically fit the song pretty well:
On the double, mainlands and islands—celebrate!
Bright clouds and storm clouds circle ’round him;
Right and justice anchor his rule.
Fire blazes out before him,
Flaming high up the craggy mountains.
His lightnings light up the world;
Earth, wide-eyed, trembles in fear.
The mountains take one look at
And melt, melt like wax before earth’s
The heavens announce that he’ll set everything right,
And everyone will see it happen—glorious!
All who serve handcrafted
And they were so proud of their ragamuffin
On your knees, all you
And
Daughters of
You,
Far, far higher than any of the
And those who love him he keeps safe,
Snatches them from the grip of the wicked.
Light-seeds are planted in the souls of
Joy-seeds are planted in good heart-soil.
So,
Give thanks to our
deadson
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- 10 Cze 2014
Dammit Jay. Pulling yet another cwcism by using Bible passages only when it suits him.
deadson
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- 10 Cze 2014
Oh, I know he isn't the only one.