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You did fine in my book, so it's okay.

I thought it was pretty good. I'm not an editor though. Maybe you should get someone at the SFWA to check it out.

I thought it was good. This one part though is a bit wonky: "any of their own customers who provide services to the Kiwi Farms" probably works...

I’ve seen fanfics written much worse get rave reviews and millions of views. I thought it was good, and most people on the Internet are barely...

Look Jersh, I love you like the retarded step-child I never had but your writing is unfocused and you don't really flow from point to point in...

You’re very, very good at writing. It’s formatted well and you paint a very good and engaging picture about what you’re trying to put across...

I'm a retard and I managed to navigate the entire thing understood everything being said, you can't please everyone. I hope to see it used as...

A copy editor wouldnt be a bad idea.

The piece was clear and direct, making sense of a long, convoluted mess that I think is poorly understood by most. Other than a couple of nits...